There have been many rules for young people to obey in society. Some rules might be too strict in the first place, but they still can be modified for young people. I firmly believe that the rules in modern society for young people to follow are not strict because young people can express their ideas against the rules and those rules could be changed. My reasons are as follow.
First of all, young people have more freedom to express themselves against the rules because there are many approaches for them to share their thoughts. As the advance of technology, young people have much more space to express their ideas and challenge the rules. For example, I have social medias like Facebook or Instagram. I feel it's unreasonable to force young people to purchase houses in Taiwan. Therefore, I share this opinion online, and I received many feedback with similar ideas. It turns out many people with the same age suffer from the same problems. If I lived in twenty years before, I would not have the freedom to express my idea because the rules back then was even more strict.
Secondly, if young people disagree with the strict rules, they have opportunities to persuade the others to modify the rules because the society is changing, restrictions might be altered as well. For example, gay marriage was not acceptable several years ago in Taiwan. But this society rule was modified. Many gay people express they lose the right to take care of lovers when they are sick because the law didn't admit the role of gay couples. Therefore, gay people started to convince the society that they should have the same right like the other people. In the end, there was a law that ensures the role of gay couples passed in 2018. This is another example that the rules in modern societies for young people are not too strict.
To sum up, I hold the belief that the rules that society expect young people to follow is not restrictive. First, young people can share their opinions for unreasonable rules. Second, young people can persuade others to modify the society rules.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'as follows'?
Suggestion: as follows
... rules could be changed. My reasons are as follow. First of all, young people have mor...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun feedback seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much feedback', 'a good deal of feedback'.
Suggestion: much feedback; a good deal of feedback
...are this opinion online, and I received many feedback with similar ideas. It turns out many p...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...vers when they are sick because the law didnt admit the role of gay couples. Therefor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, i feel, first of all, to sum up, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75833333333 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22471908339 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441666666667 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.4602015141 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5714285714 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384210585473 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135633525555 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118283417568 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277940191784 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101071475737 0.0645574589148 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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