It has always been heatedly debated whether television ads toward young kids should be allowed or not. Many people might agree that television advertising directed towards young children who aged between two to five should not be authorized; others might have a negative attitude. From my perspective, I firmly believe that television ads toward young kids should not be permitted. In what follows, I will delve into the most convincing and relevant examples that certainly could support my point of view.
To begin with, no one can deny that some uncertified companies exploit kids' innocence for their own benefits. In other words, these companies don’t care about kids; they only want to market their products. Indeed, kids with such a young age do not have the ability to distinguish between malicious and good intentions. What happened with my niece is a compelling example of this. One day, she came up to me wants to buy the original Barbie, which she saw on television. I remember that I asked her how can you tell if it is original or fake, she said that on television they mentioned that the phony Barbies do brake quickly because it is made from frail materials. In fact, her words were way bigger than her age, she was four years old. The biggest issue that struck me was when she thought that her parents do not love her because they bought those fake barbies. This story clearly illustrates that sometimes television ads selfishly try to put in spiteful notions in our kid’s mind to merchandise its products.
The second reason why I advocate this point of view lies in the fact that some ads have unseemly content. We all have come across some kids' ads that contain kissing, hugging and a lot of other inappropriate substance. For instance, a few days ago, my little sister asked me if she could borrow my laptop to watch her favorite show(Thomas and friends). I told her why donn not you let met watch it with you. She sat next me and we started watching it together. In the middle of the episode an ad popped up talks about a teen girl that are going to meet her boyfriend who has cheated on her. I was really shocked. How could these companies dare broadcasting such an ad knowing it's been watched by five years old kid. Immediately, I took my laptop from her and started explaining why I did that. As you can see, sometimes those ads must be monitored. Unfortunately, not all the parents have the time to do so. Instead, these companies should be banned from airing ads until the child is old enough to protect himself.
In conclusion, I believe that uncertified companies should be prohibited from advertising for young children. And this is to protect our kids from their improper content and their irritating concepts they are trying to embed in them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, really, second, so, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 86.0 43.0788530466 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2306.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74485596708 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57193415506 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553497942387 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1452713766 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4074074074 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.37037037037 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156813240504 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435694168495 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727384237797 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121289917341 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0833221182411 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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