Today, education is essential for students to be successful in their career because there is really hard competition between them. This put high pressure on them and they may feel stressful. In order to overcome stress, they need to enjoy. I think colleges and universities should consider students' social lives as well as their educational opportunities and spend equal money on both education and social activities.
First of all, spending a lot of time on studying is necessary for students to be successful, but without social activities, it has negative effects on them. When they spend most of their time on education, they may not concentrate on their jobs well and need to rest. It is the fact that many students suffer from depression or commit suicide because of studying hard. For example, my friend studied university in a town, which was far from the main campus of the university. There were no social activities in both the town and the branch of the university. Although he was really successful in classes, he could not enjoy life. In the end, he started to get psychological support.
Secondly, participating in social activities has many advantages for students. Socializing improves their psychological state and prevents them from depression. When they get tired of working hard, they can relax by spending time with their friends or attending different activities. Of course, investing money in classes and other educational facilities to provide better educational opportunities for students is fundamental, I think the university should also provide students with many opportunities to enjoy. Thus, students can find an opportunity to recharge themselves. So their performances increase and they become more energetic. When I was at the university, there was a festival for a week every spring. We would wait that week every year and really feel relieved. There were also different free social and sports clubs and courses at the university so that students improve their social abilities.
To sum up, the university should spend equal money on both education and other activities because it is fundamental for students to maintain both a healthy educational and social life. Many students may not be able to afford to enjoy outside of the campus. In that case, the university should provide them with a good opportunity to enjoy along with qualified education.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, i think, of course, as well as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22597402597 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91665991213 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483116883117 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.6697361489 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4782608696 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7391304348 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95652173913 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168669425465 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492715230621 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602579864825 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115769310894 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295492037831 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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