TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task

In this set of materials, both the author of the reading and the lecturer discuss if the clays found in an excavation conducted by archeologists in Iran were used as electric batteries. The author suggests that they were not batteries and gives three reasons of rejection. However, the professor finds the reasons made in the article unconvincing.

According to the reading, some conductor materials such as metal wire are needed in order to produce an electric current. Since there is no evidence found about these kinds of conductors, the clays would not have been used as an electric battery. The lecturer, on the other hand, points out that these clays were found by local people who are not educated on archeology. She believes that the clays might have been overlooked or thrown. They probably might have not been recognized by locals.

The article also contends that the copper cylinders inside the clays were likely used for the same purpose of the copper cylinders found in the ruins of Seleucia that was holding the scrolls. The speaker, on the contrary, claims that when they used with iron rods together, they can produce electric energy. She also says that there might be one purpose of these cylinders but then they might be adopted for another purpose.

Lastly, the passage contends that there were not any devices working with electricity so these batteries would have been useless. The professor rebuts this by explaining that people might use electric shocks in order to convince others that they had magical features. She also adds that in ancient times, medical scholars would used electric for stimulating muscles or treating some diseases.

Votes
Average: 8 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... might be adopted for another purpose. Lastly, the passage contends that there ...
^^^
Line 7, column 329, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'use'
Suggestion: use
...n ancient times, medical scholars would used electric for stimulating muscles or tre...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, lastly, look, so, then, such as, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1398.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 275.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08363636364 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4500133243 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530909090909 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9412139274 49.2860985944 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8571428571 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6428571429 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06452816374 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.459477940527 0.272083759551 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150655610031 0.0996497079465 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771191185029 0.0662205650399 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269624917901 0.162205337803 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482850228122 0.0443174109184 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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