SHOULD YOUND ADULT LIVE WITH THEIR PARENTS or become independent as soon as possible?
Cultures and traditions affect greatly how families raise up their children, and in large the society. We see different communities with different opinions about the perfect way to deal with young adults. In my opinion, I believe young adults should spend as much time as possible in their parents' house. I believe so for many different reasons that will be discussed below.
First, I think having the young adult staying with their family for longer time is important for understanding the meaning of the family and respect what family means. In another words, young adults develop more connections and affection to their family members the longer time they spend with them. For example, in my family we stay with our parents till we get married, which means we can live with them until we turn 30 or even more, and that build a strong relationship with our parents and with time they turn friends and not just mom and dad.
Moreover, young adults need their parents guidance all the time. Since the parents definitely have more experience in life, they will always benefit their children with advises and will help them during their tough times. Broadly speaking, this young age usually face different emotional struggles with their friends or loved ones, and i believe parents should be their to help relieve that suffer. For example, when I was in the college and had to live far away from my home, I didn't feel comfortable living in the campus with a roommate whom I wasn't able to get along with. When I spoke with my mom, she talked to me about accepting all people even if they are different from us in many ways,and try to get to know my roommate more, I did. And we become friends after that.
In conclusion, living with the family for enough time will provide us with protection, guidance and will raise our awareness about the importance of the family in our lives. Since they are the people who loved us the most and care for their young adults throughout their lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, broadly speaking, for example, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.734870317 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29448026498 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510086455331 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.313902456 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.533333333 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1333333333 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296177517015 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113635233029 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648540907454 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194964689453 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435495804003 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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