Shrimping industry rely on trawls to catch the shrimps.
The reading and lecture state the shrimping industry use trawls for catching the shrimps. However, other animals like turtles get caught in the trawls and die. While the reading suggests that accidental deaths can be reduced by installing TEDs. The lecture nevertheless refutes this by saying that TEDs are not right for the purpose.
Firstly. The reading claims that the TED mechanism comes up with the mechanical barrier that prevents animals larger than 10 cm from getting abducted. However, the lecture holds the suspicion that barriers are far from perfect. There is a need of drastic improvements in them. Although they disallow the large turtles from getting trapped still small and mid-sized turtles become the victims. He also puts forth that apart from turtles these barriers occasionally exclude the lucky shrimps as well.
Secondly. the reading makes the argument that for ensuring that all the trawls are being installed with TEDs, they must abide with the ‘Shrimp-Turtle Law’. On the other hand, lecture counters the point and says that the fisherman fails to devise the TEDs for gaining profits. While dropping the trawls in the water they remove the TEDs temporarily. Moreover, when they are far from shore it’s quite difficult to monitor them by the organizations.
In addition, the reading posits that all the shrimp products must come from ships which are certified user of TEDs-installed shrimp trawls. This will make sure that the fishermen are complying with the Shrimp-Turtle Law. The lecture refutes this idea saying that even if the shrimps are not certified accurately with the TED. They might show up the fake documents of certification and since it’s an international business spread widely across the countries it’s not easy to question a country. Hence, no one knows the authenticity of the documents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, well, while, apart from, in addition, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 296.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31081081081 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71845913849 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587837837838 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4187454246 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4705882353 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4117647059 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.17647058824 5.45110844103 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168263561501 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610370625546 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11423706928 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11254631745 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0836179740701 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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