Social media, such as facebook, influences children in a positive way. What is
your position? Use examples and reasons to develop your argument.
Personally, I think social media, like face-book, influences children in a positive way. I feel this way for
many reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, social media helps to reduce children weight. This is because nowadays children are lazy
and doesn’t work out much. Moreover, television is making them to sit at one place and become like a
couch potato. For instance, my friend’s son was addicted to cartoon serials, all he does after school is
that sit in front of TV with a cup of chips and coco-cola. Later, when I went to my friend’s house, I saw
my friend was really worried about her son’s health. Hence, I taught that little boy how to be active
using social medial. I created new face-book profile for him and showed many exercises videos shared
by other friends. In fact, he really liked it and started to perform exercise every day and eventually
reduced his weigh. Now he looks smart and health. If I had not taught him about social media he would not be thriving today.
Next, social media also helps to learn knowledge. This is because my daughter’s friends uploaded many
videos on gardening and shared her experiences. This motivated my daughter to learn more and more
about growing plants. This is quite common in today’s generation as everybody is eager to learn new
thing that doesn’t cost. Moreover, there is plethora of information which children won’t lean even from
school. Much vital information could be learnt from social media like gardening. For example, yesterday
my daughter learnt how to grow potato plant and when to harvest the same plant. These basic
knowledges she dint learn from school, whereas face-book taught this to my daughter. Today, my
daughter has plowed many potatoes which may give good yields in the near future.
Finally, face-book is an easy platform to make friends in the contemporary world. This is inasmuch as it
is ubiquitous. All you need is just an internet connect and a smartphone. For example, two years ago we
relocated to Houston. My kids were really unhappy to dwell in Houston, as they missed lots of their old
friends. Consequently, face-book helped them to search new friends. In additions, it also helped them to
stay in touch with old friends through face-book messenger, and calls. Now my children’s have lots of
networks.
In nutshell, for the aforementioned reasons, I strongly believe that social media have myriads of positive
impacts on children. This is Inasmuch as it is good for children to get actively engaged after school hours,
helps children to improve their knowledge, and make networking.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, hence, if, look, may, moreover, really, so, well, whereas, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1221719457 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75956524546 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561085972851 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3872207072 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.0322580645 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2580645161 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38709677419 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 26.0 4.53405017921 573% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123096620124 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.038806277919 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070638010554 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0391747844783 0.150856017488 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677501781068 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.82 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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