Some companies in the United States have developed "wellness" programs that give rewards or incentives to employees for achieving certain health-related goals, such as stopping smoking or losing weight. The rewards and incentives include cash prizes, extra vacation days, or reduction of the employee's portion of health insurance fees (in the United States, health insurance fees are usually shared between the employer and the employee). Several arguments have been put forward in favor of the incentive programs.
First, the awards and incentives are an excellent motivational tool for people to adopt healthy lifestyles. Many people would like to quit smoking or lose weight, but have difficulty getting started. The incentives provide the extra motivation they need. One study suggests that giving people a cash incentive d^$750 significantly increases their chances of quitting smoking. And in another study, people who got cash incentives were more likely to lose weight than those who did not.
Second, the advocates of incentive programs argue that rewarding people who are willing to adopt healthier lifestyles is only being fair. People who exercise, eat healthy diets, and maintain a healthy weight, for example, are less likely to incur medical costs. Such people deserve to pay smaller health insurance fees or get more vacation days.
Third, although the wellness incentives cost a lot of money for companies, the incentives save companies money in the long term. Losses in employee productivity due to illness can be very expensive for employers; programs that help prevent health problems are cheap by comparison. For example, incentive programs have been shown to reduce the risk of diabetes and heart disease. The cost ofthe incentives given by a company to its employees to maintain their health through prevention programs is much less than the financial losses to a company caused by employees missing work due to illness and hospitalization.
The professor in the lecture casts doubt on the reading passage’s belief that giving rewards or incentives to staff to motivate them to fulfill the goals for health is effective and beneficial. The professor points out several drawbacks of this wellness program.
Firstly, the reading mentions that the incentives, especially the financial rewards, are the wisest option for people to keep fit due to the study results. However, the lecturer declares that the effects of such motivations can merely last briefly on account of another study’s report which shows that such temporary influence lose its effectiveness after a period of time. For example, they may get back to their previous lifestyle again, such as smoking or putting on their weight.
Secondly, contrary to the reading passage’s idea that rewarding people who live healthily can ensure the justice for those people since they incur medical costs less frequently , the professor states that although it is fair for these healthy employees, but it lose its equity for those who are unintentionally unhealthy because a healthy body actually relies on a myriad of factors. For instance, some people may be too busy with their families to do exercise. Also, in some cases, it is the genetic factor that results in people’s obesity.
Finally, the reading believes that the program can in turn bring back a financial report for the company due to the decrease of staff’s absence of work. The lecturer, on the other hand, contends that it is not ascertained that it can literally save money for the company in the long term because the effects will take years to be obvious, while the employees generally tend to stay in a single company for a short time, which means that they are likely to leave their job when the effects of the program are still vague. As a result, the company cannot get financial beneficial.
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Message: Did you mean 'loses'?
Suggestion: loses
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, briefly, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11182108626 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71744894784 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575079872204 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 110.016903284 48.9658058833 225% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 145.454545455 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4545454545 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 17.8181818182 5.45110844103 327% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174305329551 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623185177741 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363061346801 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105566461888 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213889346978 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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