In some countries teenager have jobs while they are still students. Do you think it is a good idea? Support your opinion by specific reasons and details to support your answer.
One of the most crucial achievement is knowledge which can be obtained by two main methods including, experiencing and attaining information by theoretically in universities, colleges, and high school. In my point of view, I personally believe that teens should not work during their academic period due to it can be potential distraction for their curiosity of their interest and they may face the problem of failing classes.
First and foremost, even though financial problem is the most common problem for every students especially those high-school teenagers, they had better focus on their further career by recognizing their interests through the many curriculums such as calculus, physics, art science, biology and etc. Comparison of earnings between the part time job that most teenagers willing to work by sacrificing their precious lessons with professional job after the long period of academic studies is an incomparable. For example, one of my friends, Bob, used to work in Mcdonalds as dish washer instead of studying hard in order to enroll top-notch university. Thus, he ended up his high-school without purpose, dreams and vision which are the considered as most valuable trigger for anyone to study and employ by their own aspire.
Furthermore, most students who work during their period of study instead of trying hard to understand and accomplish their curriculums tend to fail the courses indisputably. My own experience is compelling example of it. When I was in fresh man year of my university years, I used to work website front end developer in small startup company. Even though, I have learned many things about the website designing, nothing of it was related with my university curriculums. In consequences, I failed half of my courses that had taken on that semester then I despaired that losing my parent’s faith in me to accomplish university with good grades.
To conclude, even though many people think that having a part time job along with school year is good idea, I strongly disagree with the following statement. Regardless of how many advantage it has, disadvantages and consequences outweigh its advantages. It can delay one’s high-school, college, and university years. Also, dire consequences of it can spoil desires and inquisitiveness.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 291, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...calculus, physics, art science, biology and etc. Comparison of earnings between the part...
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Line 2, column 335, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...etc. Comparison of earnings between the part time job that most teenagers willing to work...
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Line 2, column 490, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[1]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
... the long period of academic studies is an incomparable. For example, one of my friends, Bob, u...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o study and employ by their own aspire. Furthermore, most students who work duri...
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Line 4, column 58, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... though many people think that having a part time job along with school year is good idea...
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Line 4, column 177, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun advantage seems to be countable; consider using: 'many advantages'.
Suggestion: many advantages
... following statement. Regardless of how many advantage it has, disadvantages and consequences ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, may, so, then, thus, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31868131868 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04647414392 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596153846154 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1151458742 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.066666667 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2666666667 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73333333333 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.049914489 0.236089414692 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0168205744803 0.076458572812 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0303598257513 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0334955631346 0.150856017488 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220234322023 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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