Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
When it comes to the issue that it is a good idea to offer amount of money by the parents to their children for each high grade they get in the school, some people may agree with this idea and give us sounds reasons for their beliefs. On the other hand, some other people might disagree and have different opinions. Also, those opponents could provide us with strong purposes to support their thoughts. I believe that offering amount of money by the parents to their children for their succeed is a great idea because of many reasons. This short essay will demonstrate some points regarding my point of view in the following paragraph:
First of all, in my opinion, it is widely understood that the life today is very hard. So, the it is a good idea to learn the children who to earn money during their early life stage. When the parents give their children money for the good grade that they get in the school, that will learn the child how to work hard and doing his best to earn money. And that has good consequences for the child ability to manage his time and resources in best way. However, the person whom not learn how to face the future early will find a lot of obstacles in the future.
Another point why I advocate that it is a good idea to give the child sum of money when he gets good marks in the school is the rapid development of the technology. Today the life develops rapidly and everyone tries to follow the technology by buying the new devices. So, if the child learns how to manage his resources to reach his goal and buy what he need, that will build the child’s character. Eventually, that has great impact on the child’s life because he will understand how to use his money in a suitable way and puts priorities for his requirements. On the other hand, if the child do not know how it is hard to gain money, he will waste his parents money and that will lead to big problems to has parent.
Finally, it is well-established fact that all the parents looking for seeing their children succeed in the school. So, the money will be a good motivator for the children to work ward in order to manage their resources and gain the gifts. Moreover, that money makes the child feel how his parent take care of his study. So, he will do his best to make them feel proud of him. Additionally, it motivates the child to compete with his classmate in a good manor.
From what has been discussed above, we may draw a conclusion which says that, people who hold opposite idea may have the right to believe in that, but my opinion, and other people opinions are overwhelmingly too much to be ignored.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
...d that the life today is very hard. So, the it is a good idea to learn the children wh...
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Line 3, column 439, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'in the best'.
Suggestion: in the best
...bility to manage his time and resources in best way. However, the person whom not learn...
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Line 5, column 512, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a suitable way" with adverb for "suitable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...he will understand how to use his money in a suitable way and puts priorities for his requirement...
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Line 5, column 720, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'parented'.
Suggestion: parented
...d that will lead to big problems to has parent. Finally, it is well-established fac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, well, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44927536232 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35512319924 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438923395445 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8142141184 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.45 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.15 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314892286259 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10550211842 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116894009128 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178765928393 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118314133464 0.0645574589148 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 58.1214874552 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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