Nowadays, in the modern era, education plays an vital role in a human's success in life. While different people have distinct idea toward the ways and means of a efficient study, in my point of view, one of best ways to persuades student to study better is to give them prizes such as money as an incentive. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
To commence with, the first exquisite point to be considered here is that as mentioned before, student might be reluctant to study and achieve high grades since they do not know that studying hard and performing well in school is of paramount importance to be reach your goals in future. Providing inducement such as giving money as a reward will help them to do better. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what has elaborate above. Here, I depict one of my own experience. My brother did not intend to study well when he was in the middle school because he found it boring. Therefore, my father told him that if he get good marks, he will give him some money to buy his favorite toy. This suggestion really worked, Not only my brother got high point at the end of year, but also he learned that if he works hard it will pay off.
The other subtle point worth mentioning here is that by giving money to children, they will eventually learn to manage their money better in life rather than other people. By giving them money they will understand that they have a finite source of money that they should manage that to buy the thing they really wants.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating this issue is that by working and studying hard to earn money, they will understand the worth of money. Therefore, they will learn that they should not spend money recklessly since its hard to earn it.
Throughout the following paragraphs, among the most predominant reasons in support of this contention heightening the accuracy, it could be authentically concluded that from my vantage point, giving money in response to getting high grade is a fantastic idea because it provide an incentive, help children to manage their money and cause that children know about the importance of money. These three reasons are major points I can vouch to back up my explanation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, so, then, therefore, well, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70175438596 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49074643736 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.873644193 48.9658058833 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.25 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9375 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4375 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209567773498 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629653067565 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517754622751 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116238523344 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524780269272 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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