In today's world, parents pay too much attention to their children's education in comparison with the past and thereby implementing various methods in this regard, one of which includes extrinsic motivation such as external rewards. While some people posit that this method would halt children's desire for education and learn in the long-term, my belief is that the virtues outweigh its drawback. The reasons support this idea are manifold, two of which--that is--the power of encouragement and learning about some aspects of real life are the most conspicuous ones.
To begin with, it is worth mentioning that nowadays, the young generation is more educated and well-informed than ever. This is partly because of the more caring parents who do their best to conduct their children toward a prosperous future. Therefore, they make use of different approaches to reach this goal. These approaches mostly consist of diverse external and internal factors to motivate and encourage children into studying more and getting higher grades. Although intrinsic motivation would result in a more long-term positive effect, recent research has found that encouraging children by some external factors like money could also make them craving for knowledge. After a while, this craving for learning turns into a consistent longing to study, resulting in top grades.
Another salient point in corroborating my stance in this subject is that by doing so, children can learn an important lesson about life. To be more specific, they can realize that in order to achieve something important, working hard for it a necessity. Nothing precious and invaluable can be obtained unless they strive and put maximum effort into it. In other words, by studying hard, not only do they gain money, but they also achieve high grades; both of which positively influence their educational and financial life, So that they would work hard in the future in order to live a high-quality life in terms of financial and mental health situations. For example, when I was in high school, I had no desire to study Chemistry and even did not care about my grade in that course. My father noticed this problem and tried to motivate me by giving a reward whenever I achieved a high grade in Chemistry. Afterward, my grades were substantially improved which made me feel so much better about myself and save some extra money, besides increasing my self-esteem.
Thus, with all this taken into account, it would be better if parents consider motivating their children by some occasional rewards in order to lead them to study more and achieve higher grades. As mentioned above, the most notable reasons for this are the proven positive effects of encouraging and motivating children on a better educational and career life in the future. However, parents should be careful not to overdo it.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2383.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1247311828 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66324442215 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559139784946 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 743.4 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1040746905 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.421052632 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4736842105 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21052631579 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246551774443 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761771569067 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364416368653 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150248257629 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0152415489767 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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