Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Young children are vulnerable. They easily get affected by the surrounding environment, this surrounding could be their parents, friends, etc.. While some thinks that the use of mobile would disturb the behavior of their children while others think the opposite. In my opinion, it is an individual choice of a child that how he or she uses a particular device. To illustrate this, I am presenting some examples. Firstly, mobile with internet access enable us to connect our friends, family, and others. The use of social networking sites like facebook, instagram, etc, has increased the communication among people and connected the. Some children use these sources to connect with their well wishers, and some use this to read posts, like or comment fb & insta's status etc. So, at the end, it all depends on an individual how, he or she perceive this assets. For instance, one of my close friend in the university made his connection to a top executive of a company through the Facebook. He provides his background and interacted about his goals, dream job. The company's executive affected by his thoughts, and communication. He arranged an interview of my friend in his company, and finally my fried got selected. This way, what you do with your assets, it matters not what is assets. Secondly, the excessive use of mobile could have negative impacts on children study. In this case also, this opinion is highly debatable. The correct correlation among study with mobile depends on the individual child. While some child use mobile to watch movies or cartoons, to play online games, others use this to watch online study tutorials in youtube, reading their educational material through study applications. To illustrate this, recently I read in newspaper that a person cleared the toughest exam in India that is Indian Administrative Service, without any outside study support excepts online material through his mobile. This way, a child own motives matters a lot in what will he or she do if he or she get a such a diverse device. In conclusion, the use of technology can make the future of children as well as can destroy it. It is their parents responsibilities that they should be taught about use of a specific tools. If parents teach their children to open reading sites in the mobile and read about the content, they will do it and learn it whereas if parents use their mobile to watch youtube music or other entertainment stuffs, then their children would imitate their actions. All in all, it is about behavior to use an asset not about what assets itself.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 143, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...ing could be their parents, friends, etc.. While some think that the use of mobile...
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Line 1, column 146, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... could be their parents, friends, etc.. While some think that the use of mobile would...
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Line 3, column 712, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...ve matters a lot in what will he or she do if he or she gets a such a diverse devi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2154.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97459584296 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75525171392 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515011547344 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8283383548 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.75 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0416666667 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.79166666667 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126748340438 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0399754204923 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456566768468 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0879194124116 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311175201313 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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