Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
It seems to be a controversial statement. A smartphone is one of the smartest inventions of modern science. In spite of having many disadvantages, we got a huge amount of advantages from a smartphone. So, I would like to say that the smartphone should be available in children hand for educational purposes.
At first, I would like to say that why do I agree with this statement. Nowadays, the world has become competitive and technology based. we are in a modern era. we have to utilize modern inventions. a smartphone is one of them. Nowadays the school, colleges, and universities are based on technology. we know everything related to education from the internet. Like a teacher update the term final routine or the result of today's spot test in the student corner of the school website. if the children have no smartphone with internet connection then they are not able to visit their one sites from that school. In this way, they may miss some important information and update of your school. That's why their result may be decreased. Suppose, parents are very busy. they are not able to give so much time to their children. If their children have a smartphone with internet access, they can make a voice call or video call via messenger, whats app and other social media to connect each other and to know the update. so its make the relationship strpong between children and parents.
Thought it has more advantages, it has disadvantages too. Children may addict in social media, video games by smartphone. They may also visit adult sites which are not appropriate their age. They may abstain from the study. It may create a huge problem.
Finally, I would like to make a conclusion that children should have a smartphone with internet access and they should use it only for educational purposes and for those purposes which are good for them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, may, so, then, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1544.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84012539185 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76619081008 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51724137931 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.6704017937 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 61.76 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.76 20.6045352989 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.08 5.45110844103 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183226204627 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433171995464 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456497065753 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107724826665 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522440353763 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.9 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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