Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Nowadays smart phones are inevitable part of our life, they have eased the way we live in many ways. However, does that mean that children need to own smart phones too? Many parents think that this is good idea to raise children, technology friendly and give their children free access of smart phone. But I'm not agree with this idea, Smart phones are not created for children.
Glaring at digitals monitors can cause serious damages to kid’s eyes. Children in young ages have very weak and vulnerable eyes. They are still growing and their eyes are in the developing phase, which needs a great care and attention. I have a cousin who owned a smart phone when she was very young and she would play games on her phone for many hours per day. She had healthy eyes when she was born, but at the age of 8 suddenly her eyes became weaker and she started to wear glasses. Her doctor claimed that this damage is caused by her intense use of smart phone. As you can see, smart phones can be very harmful for young children eyes and it can lead to serious damages.
Cell phones with internet access are an open door to the huge unrestricted virtual world, which is not always appropriate for children. One wrong click can lead to harmful and violent content on the internet and it can be dangerous for children emotions. For instance, many of gaming apps offer free games in exchange of showing ads. Some of these ads are not suitable for children or if you click on them, they can lead you to improper explicit contents. Therefore, unrestricted internet access on phones can be harmful for children.
In conclusion, smart phones are not created for children; they are not suitable for them. Although others may believe that smart phones are important too for keeping in touch, I think that disadvantages outweigh the advantages and we should not let young children own smart phones. We should let children grow naturally, without distraction and damages of smart phones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...hildren free access of smart phone. But Im not agree with this idea, Smart phones ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, for instance, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73043478261 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33253204353 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515942028986 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0319288704 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8947368421 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1578947368 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26315789474 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373718640733 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129219793923 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874776702968 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243521890386 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569880962133 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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