Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
The world is developing at a fast pace. With its advancement, every day we get to see new electronic devices. The harmful effects caused by these are more as compared to the advantages received from them. So, I strongly agree with the statement that ' parents should forbid young children from owning a smartphone, especially cell phones with internet access .'
When a young child gets stick to a cell phone, it becomes very easy for him to get diverted away from his academics. He becomes too busy with phone. Instead of focussing on studies, his concentration is over the internet, games, social media etc.
Ultimately, he loses his track of goal and may even spoil his career.
Secondly, every computerized device always emits radiations in and around his surroundings. These transmissions can affect the human brain. Also, while operating such devices the child is bound to sit in the same position for long hours, which is a major reason for back pains and other bone-related issues.
Thirdly, while using internet over cell phones, there might be chances that the child can come in contact with bad people. It is very easy for anyone to convince the young generation to do any illegal activity and many proofs of such issues can be seen in the newspaper every one or the other day.
Last but not the least, when young students develop a habit of sticking to cell phone, they rarely go out to do some outdoor activity and interact with any new person. As a result, the child may become lonely and might not have that many friends. They lose contact with the outside world and start living in a virtual world of theirs.
For instance, when I was in the first year of my graduation. I was gifted a new phone by my parents. As soon as it came into my hands, I started observing some significant changes in myself (after some months). My number of friends started going down and I became less interactive. I rarely went out to do some exercise and even started to use the phone during the night, when I was supposed to be studying at that time .
To sum up, I would just say that the cell phone was created only for our own benefit. There should be limited use of this device, so that we do not get affected by them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, for instance, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61964735516 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45120726022 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574307304786 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.615214609 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.7391304348 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2608695652 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.69565217391 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.53405017921 176% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27785727044 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678019631204 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758037085803 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114212077546 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061244835828 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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