Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
The childhood in human world has seen a major transformation with the advent of technology and so, kids have also modified their mindset. This change has been accepted by many in a positive way, while others just think that the technological growth has hampered our skill-set. In my view, adolescent are now putting more hard-word in enhancing their creativity in comparison to youth of the past. I have this opinion for two reasons, which I will be explaining in the following essay.
First of all, with the rise in technology, the number of fields are expanding which is giving more chances to youngsters to use their brain and experiment with something new. Earlier we only had three to four common field, like commerce, science, arts etc. , and in fact, there were fewer and limited job profiles. But as of now, we have field that are combination of two opposing subjects like computing biology, mechantronics etc, as a result students are putting more effort in exercising new stuffs and inventing something of their own. My own life experience is a compelling example of this. My main subject, when I was in high school, were Physics, Chemistry and Mathematics. I chose engineering course in my graduation as I intended to be an mechanical engineer afterwards. But at the same time I was interested in music as well, I had taken up some classes to learn playing flute, and I wanted to continue this hobby of mine even after completing my graduation. Suddenly, I came to know that there was a car company who was hiring people with the knowledge of mechanical engineering, and their main job was to design the patterns of car tyres that should be related to musical pattern. I applied for that join and to my surprise, I was hired. We hardly had anything like in this past and I am thankful to technology, which helped me to pursue my passion.
Secondly, currently we have video games which require more mind exercise, so playing computer games can help a kid in strengthening his brain logically. Nowadays, there are many games which are especially designed for kids, which are aimed towards helping them in academics. Consequently, this has given growth to a healthy competition and many new opportunities. For instance, my friend was in habit of playing PUBG in his first year of University and with time, he became an expert in that game. After few months, I heard that he had won in a national level PUBG competition and had received cash reward. Now he has started his own Youtube channel, which guides others about certain tactics related to that game. If technology would not have advanced, my friend would not have been able to discover his hidden talent.
To sum up, innovations has revolutionized our lives in a big and healthy way. This is because, it had opened up many new opportunities for students and also, because it has strengthened our logical and analytical skill.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
.... This change has been accepted by many in a positive way, while others just think that the techn...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'field' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'fields'.
Suggestion: fields
...arlier we only had three to four common field, like commerce, science, arts etc. , an...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...field, like commerce, science, arts etc. , and in fact, there were fewer and limit...
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Message: Use past participle here: 'fielded'.
Suggestion: fielded
...ed job profiles. But as of now, we have field that are combination of two opposing su...
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to engineer'.
Suggestion: to engineer
...ics, Chemistry and Mathematics. I chose engineering course in my graduation as I intended t...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...se in my graduation as I intended to be an mechanical engineer afterwards. But at ...
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to play'.
Suggestion: to play
...l, I had taken up some classes to learn playing flute, and I wanted to continue this ho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, as to, for instance, in fact, as a result, first of all, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8370221328 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80773446907 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557344064386 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 751.5 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3749812818 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.166666667 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7083333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45833333333 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0510441751464 0.236089414692 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0166269943613 0.076458572812 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.028113661407 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0339736006091 0.150856017488 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353986530594 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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