Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Taking care of children is not a easy task for every parents, Here I believe if we keep them away from smart phones with internet access will be better for both parents as well as children. So I would like to disagree the given statement by putting my own opinion with examples that describe the scenario in best way.
Now a day’s children can catch up the things much faster than us, they have a ability to thing and grasp the things very quickly. So, at this stage if we give them the smart phone and any other device which having the internet connect connection might affect them in a bad way. Although they can learn lot many things from the internet using their smartphone but I believe that this is not the right time to introduce them to the social world. There are chances that they can get used to it and make that habit as a part of their life. Here we being as a parent should teach them the difference between the social and practical world. That can make their life easy and helps them grow up in proper way.
One of nice was very active and loved to play with the gadgets and the smartphones. And her parents were very impressed with her talent. But after certain time period she started acting in inappropriate manner like we keep smart phone with her at that time only she used to stay calm, otherwise her overall behaviour was very unacceptable. Reason behind this she made thing as a part of her life and was get addicted. And now suffering from many things like headache, not having the proper visuals due to the blue light that smartphone emits.
Here I would like to conclude in the statement by given my personal experience in this. And I believe if we consider this over all scenario we can surely say that smart phone can have band impacts on children if we being as parents allow them to use it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Taking care of children is not a easy task for every parents, Here I bel...
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... access will be better for both parents as well as children. So I would like to disagree t...
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...ith examples that describe the scenario in best way. Now a day’s children can catch up...
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...et connect connection might affect them in a bad way. Although they can learn lot many thing...
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...rsonal experience in this. And I believe if we consider this over all scenario we...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.40828402367 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.18791733128 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51775147929 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4249179328 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3333333333 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5333333333 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.93333333333 5.45110844103 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19886718091 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635756475303 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739308296291 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139316674687 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0874296375515 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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