Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Technological developments made it inevitable to use smart phones that fit in our pockets. They gradually became an indispensable part of our lives, even for teenagers and children. However, it is widely questioned whether young children should be permitted to use smart phones. Personally, I believe that they must be allowed to use them for mainly three reason which I will discuss in the subsequent paragrapsh.
To begin with, the science of psychology demonstrated that prohibiting a certain thing will make people become more inclined to that thing. Moreover, this phenomenan can be observed in young children more strongly. For instance, if you try to put some strict regulations about using smart phones, your kid will tend to use it more and try every possible way to reach a smart phone. Consequently, this will cause even worse outcomes such as addiction and more problems between parents and children.
Moreover, thecnological advancemets in smart phone industry offers a lot of possibilites for those who wants to study for their classes. A lot of online learning materials are available on the Internet and children have the chance to benefit from them by only clicking a button. On top of that, nowadays the majority of the school administrations start to use these devices as a means of education. So, why not take advantage of the practicality of smart phones as they will encourage more and more children to study more efficiently with their both entartaining and educative platforms.
Finally, using a smart phone is the only way to connact with the children in urgent situations. There is no doubt that they provide security for them as parents can tract their children and learn where they are. An excellent way to illustrate this is the kidnapping news that we often see on TV. Last month a news about a lost children case showed exatly the crucial benefit of smart phones. The policemen could have found the child thanks to an app that had been installed by his parents a long time ago. Therefore, parents must allow their children to use them in order to protect them from many dangers.
To sum up, one can logicially conclude that the benefits of the smart phones to promote their children's academic success and to prevent disastrous results of taking the smart phones away.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, no doubt, such as, to begin with, to sum up, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97668393782 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75411021758 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562176165803 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5435144447 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.105263158 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3157894737 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31578947368 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250731471725 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773239363189 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447228678429 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147883840485 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149135424493 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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