Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Parents are concerned about their children’s use of smartphones because they think that the such tools may influence their offspring. Personally, I believe that allowing young people to utilize cellphone is beneficial for them and totally correct. I have three rationales for holding this opinion, and I will develop my ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, if parents invariably regulate their children’s behavior towards mobile phone, the children will be incapable of controlling themselves once they start living independently from their parents. Most adults tend to control every activity of their children, and give too much attention for them. Therefore, kids start being dependently from their parents more and more. Eventually, they may be even unable to regulate their temptation to overuse cellphones. On the other hand, when children are allowed to employ mobile phone, they will learn to managing their own use of the tools. Afterwards, when they get adults, they will be available to live self-sufficiently. In a consequence, overparenting may pose youngsters’ too much reliance on their parents.
Secondly, youngsters will communicate with their companions through the phones and internets, which facilitate them to have friends. Nowadays, social platforms including “Facebook” and “Instagram” are significant medium of conversation for people, especially young ones. Therefore, they can take advantage on these mediums by making partners on the internet thanks to their phone. Otherwise, they cannot get in touch with others due to their limited access to these platforms. Needless to say, having no friends may occasion some problems such as loneliness. Consequently, mobile phones will probably augment juveniles’ probability of having big number of friends.
Finally, smartphones can be utilized to improve the way of learning which is the major concern of parents. In my opinion, many parents think that their children will not study their lesson because they may expend most time for their phone. However, they need to allow for that smartphones may help adolescents to learn academic disciplines efficiently thanks to the function and applications. For example, they can take pictures of lectures at classes, peruse scientific materials related to their lesson, or ask specific questions from their teachers with phone. Of course, all of these things are beneficial for teenagers and their learning process. By contrast, these matters are remote for adolescents who are prevented to utilize phones and internet. As a result, the activity of studying can be enhanced but not destroyed in light of mobile phone.
In summation, I am of the opinion that children need to be accepted to employ mobile phones and internet. This is because they need to learn to control themselves, they can make friends, and phone might help them to study their lesson.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2463.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49776785714 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9547762903 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53125 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3275452353 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.52 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.92 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22365967356 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710449697531 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405916642213 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141935335154 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215257726869 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.32 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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