Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones cell phones with Internet access while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch Which point of view do you think is better and why

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Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?

I think that children should not own smartphones for various reasons which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.

To begin with, I think that smartphones will destroy their childhood because smartphones can be very addictive just like video games so if they own smartphones then they might miss out on many things. They will not play outdoors with their friends and childhood is the age to run around in the parks with friends and play outdoor games. No doubt that smartphones help to keep in touch with friends, but smartphones are also very addictive to make kids stop making memories with their friends. They might get stuck in the life of selfies and Instagram videos, trying to live up to the social media expectations. I don’t think that we want children to experience all of that.

Furthermore, I think that children should use the internet under an adult’s supervision because it is important to make sure that they are not exposed to violent and inappropriate content on the internet as they are not mature enough to make decisions for themselves. So, if they start to own cellphones with the internet, then it will be difficult to supervise their internet activity. Since they will own smartphones, they can use the internet anytime, without their parent’s supervision. They might get exposed to things that are harmful to them.

Lastly, I think that if children start owning cellphones and get addicted to it, then they might stay full time in front of the screen which can damage their eye vision. I have an eight-year-old cousin who owns a smartphone who wears glasses bigger than mine. I have never seen her play with friends. In fact, you will find her online on social media all the time.

To sum up, I think that children should not own smartphones because it can destroy their childhood. They can use their parent’s cellphone to keep in touch.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 103, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...et addicted to it, then they might stay full time in front of the screen which can damage...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, lastly, so, then, i think, in fact, no doubt, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89719626168 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65354005667 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501557632399 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3325260361 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.25 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0625 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258388552846 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952296039936 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498175184934 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166583169319 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278535803488 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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