Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
The past 50 years has seen many aspects of studying and researching by humans. In all modernized societies, studying has always been among primary concerns of human beings' lives. It is axiomatic that almost all of children spend a large part of their lives studying. A plethora of people hold the conviction that it is better to give money to children when they get high grade in their school, whereas the others might hold exactly the opposite conviction. I firmly endorse the former one due to couple of reasons. In what follows, this essay is going to aptly delve the outstanding reasons in my point of view.
First of all, lessons educating in the schools are incredibly vital for the people's lives. Since, they are about social and historical issues and many parts of the science. Therefore, student must pay enough attention to their lessons and also in many cases the high grade is the sign of well-studied lessons. Most of the children do not know the importance of this fact and they do not pay enough attention or spend time on reading their lessons. Parents may lead to encourage them to get better grade and by this means they will be major reason of the success of the children. In my own experience, in some of my critical exams, my parents gave me some money as a gift and it was really best motivation for me to study more and more.
Secondly, the another noteworthy point is about the finding the cost of time, and age by children. Indeed, children most usually spend their time on studying and they do not way. This gift will something be such as salary which the children might earn until they get older and find the point of their parent's view of studying. For example, one of my cousins did not like to studying and achieve high grade because it was not precious for him. On the other hand, their parents gave him some money in order to his grade. They told him the more grade, the more money. My cousin did his best and now he is studying abroad at the most famous university.
To put it in briefly, giving money to the children for their high grade in their exams is the best motivation for them. This act brings that they will study more until they grow enough to understand the importance of the education. The advisable point is that I strongly encourage parents to give them little gift to their children to show them that nowadays, education is something vital for living.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 683, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'really the best'.
Suggestion: really the best
...gave me some money as a gift and it was really best motivation for me to study more and mor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, whereas, for example, in brief, such as, first of all, in many cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1981.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58564814815 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33376961677 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474537037037 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7503973277 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0454545455 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6363636364 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354386572914 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100789895852 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720435188067 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233920981188 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437401801031 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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