Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In civilized and industrialized societies, the effects of famous people on the children and youth has been always among primary concerns of human being's lives. Today it is axiomatic that the children are more prone to be influenced of the celebrities's behavior. A plethora of people posses the conviction that this issue focuses more on the younger people than the older one, whereas others might hold exactly the opposite view. Whether the agreement or disagreement depends on the human's opinions. I firmly endorse the former conviction instead the later one. In what follows, I am going to aptly delve into the most outstanding reasons to advocate my point of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that in such circumstance, youth society are in learning period and they are searching the world which is around them. Mostly because of the different social medias, the significant characteristics that they see, are about these famous guys. Also The more intelligence, the more attraction about the celebrities. However, this issue have less attraction to the old people, since they have built their personality and do not need to learn things anymore. In my own experience, the younger people in my family, always consider about the some of their favorite celebrities.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that the fantastic and attractive appearance of these famous people. Most of the celebrities pay attention to their behavior and clothes to be best. So younger persons will be more attract to them. For instance you can see all around the world, people exactly the younger one, who put on the same clothes as the celebrities have, however it is not followed by older one.
To put it in briefly, all the enumerated reasons lead us to the conclusion that the young people are affected more by the famous guys than the older persons. However a paramount issue that must be mentioned is that this can not be used as a prescription for everybody and some counter examples might be existed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, first, however, if, so, whereas, for instance, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1710.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05917159763 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74292907051 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53550295858 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9805315944 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.588235294 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11764705882 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230317661837 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664384108452 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530598797372 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136541321997 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0157116469156 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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