Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In modernized and common societies, movies and television programs have always been among concerns of humans' being lives. It is axiomatic that the most of people, specifically the younger ones, are attracted to these entertainments and spend big part of their lives watching them. A plethora of people possess the conviction that the negative influences of these programs are more than the positive ones, whereas the others might hold exactly the opposite conviction. I firmly agree with the former idea due to its teaching bad behavior and creating some psychological disease in their life. In what follows, this essay is going to aptly delve into the explaining these outstanding reasons.
First of all, there many films and televisions programs specially the comedy or action which show some unusual behavior that cause to children learn them. These entertainments are not rare and take about 40 percent of the programs. In my experiment, when I was a child, there was a program which was about some rural people in the past and their behavior such as fighting and talking together was funny, but there were to terrible exactly for us. Since in that time, when I was in the school, all of my classmates were imitating the same activities in that film. Therefore, in my opinion this is one of two bad effects of the television programs.
The second noteworthy point of the negative effect of films and television programs is about the movies which show too terrifying scenes or awful ones. In psychological view, these scenes have an extremely negative stresses for children who they do not have the ability to manage their emotions and these terrible movies cause several illnesses for them. For instance, assume a child who is watching a body which is being bitten by some strange or terrifying dog. This view definitely might have a bad influence on the children's minds.
To put it in briefly, there are many films and television programs which not only helpful for the people and exactly the younger one, but also are so bad for their behaviors, emotions, and minds. It is advisable that some psychological and social studies should be under every movies and programs to enhance their quality for people. Furthermore, these kinds of films with those mentioned issue should have some warning at the beginning of film to alarm the parents to prevent their children to watch them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...s being lives. It is axiomatic that the most of people, specifically the younger ones, are att...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, whereas, for instance, in brief, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2002.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.005 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61538596578 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5815268315 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.764705882 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5294117647 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13333403132 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451429343712 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417318580223 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0863456173205 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367816782948 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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