Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea

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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

In the progressive world where we live in, parents do anything they can to help their children to have a successful future. It is a highly debated issue that whether parents should offer their school-age children money for each high grade or mark they get in school or not. Personally, I prefer parents to give their child money after getting a high mark in school and I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

First of all, offering children money or prize will motivate them to pay more attention to their lessons and study better to get high grades. To be more specific, everyone likes money and prize and this desire is more powerful in children. On the other hand, consider children with reluctancy to their lessons and there is no goal for them to be inspired. With offering them prize, parents will increase their desire to study their lessons. My personal experience is a good example of this concept. When I was an elementary school student, my mother offered me a deal that If I could pass the exceptional high talents student’s exam, she would buy me a play station. This deal inspired me a lot and tried hard to get that prize and finally I succeeded. This example taught me that hadn't she offered me that prize, I would not have been successful.

Secondly, this method not only helps children to get high marks in their exams, it also helps them to learn to try hard to earn money. Accordingly, if they want money, they should try and work hard to earn it. Thus, they can learn this lesson from early ages. For instance, my brother has a son. He gave his son 5 dollars after each exam that he got good grades in it. This approach made my nephew so strong and he got used to this thought that he should try hard for everything. now he is a successful cofounder of a digital marketing company. this example proves that how much it could be effective if parents offer their children money for high grades.

To sum up, I strongly believe that parents should give their children money or prize after they get good mark in their exams because it motivates them and helps them to learn the lesson of trying hard to achieve goals.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, i feel, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53282828283 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31867553775 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487373737374 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5689313019 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.75 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453438072362 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139804693311 0.076458572812 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12388450707 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.306215247117 0.150856017488 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13749727395 0.0645574589148 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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