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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.
Do you think this is a good idea?

Undoubtedly, education plays a crucial role in individuals’ life, and almost all parents are concern about their children that can be educated properly. Duo to this fact, some parents offer their school-age children money if they can get high marks. However, others disagree with this decision. In my opinion, paying money to children because of their brilliant results at school might be suitable and have positive effects on children’ attribute.

First of all, it is believed that some children are not really interested in studying and they get bored by their courses. Therefore, giving money to school-age children can be a proper solution to encourage them in order to study for getting great mark and also earn some money to buy something they want. In addition, the more high marks they get at school, the more money they achieve from parents and it can be a temptation for children to try even harder than before for getting awesome results. For example, when I was a child, I did not like mathematics at school and I could barely get a good mark in this lesson. Once my parents promised me to raise my pocket money if I could get a great mark at final exam. I can clearly remember that how much time I spent on studying math and finally I became successful and I could be the first-ranked at that exam.

Secondly, paying students money can teach them how to manage their budget which is really important for their future lives as an adult. Although the children are too young to spend their money rationally and not to waste it, they can learn how to manage their money after a while and they will be able to find some ways in order to save their money and also purchase some stuffs simultaneously.

In conclusion, some parents try to encourage their children to get high marks by offering them money and I definitely agree with this idea. Not only are children encouraged to study harder for getting more money, but also they can learn how to manage their budget.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70977011494 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49154170943 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494252873563 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6774578009 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.071428571 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8571428571 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1428571429 5.45110844103 204% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.466409125314 0.236089414692 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.192021525376 0.076458572812 251% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13082303703 0.0737576698707 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.317115744827 0.150856017488 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070642733566 0.0645574589148 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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