Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that there is a lot of psychological, social and educational positive effects in offering money or other kinds of rewards to children. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that offering money to children leads to they never understand the appropriate aim of education. However, I, to a great extent, believe that it is a good idea that parents offer money to their school-age children for each high grade they get in school.

First and foremost, it would be a kind of prize for them. Everybody be happy if their attempt regarded by other ones. Based on this fact, most high prestige universities or well-known companies offered different types of awards to people. Moreover, it can motivate people for more trying and improving themselves. For example, when I was in middle school, I hated mathematics. I always got low grades in this course. Nonetheless, my father suggested he will give some money to me to buy my favorite earrings, if I improve my mathematical skill, and it worked.

Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that young children are not mature enough to understand the actual meaning of education. Therefore, parents should stimulate them to study by some concepts which are familiar to them. For instance, I have a cousin and she is seven years old. If I ask her to stay quiet for two hours because I have an important exam, she would not accept it. Conversely, if I ask her to be quiet instead of 2 hours of video games, she will immediately accept it.

Finally, yet importantly, it would be a good opportunity for parents to teach financial management to their children. For example, my father not only encouraged me and increased my interest in study mathematics, but also along with it, I learned to save money. I had stopped to go around with my friends, and spent money on the different cafe, or bought something that I did not really need. Even, after some month I tried to deposit my money in a bank with more short-term profit.

On the basis of the reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that offering money to children for each good grade in school is a good idea. Because it can motivate them to seek, they will learn to manage their money, and they gradually will understand the prominent goal of education.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, finally, first, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, really, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, kind of, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79310344828 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73787945078 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554187192118 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6134954901 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6666666667 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.80952380952 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327325674743 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.092999403186 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121457368925 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197350063092 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125792890635 0.0645574589148 195% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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