Some parents offer their school-age children money for rach high grade (mark) they get in high school. Do you think this is a good idea?
In today's societies, parents use a plethora of incentive to encourage kid to pay more attention to their classes and get excellent scores. These methods depending on the parent’s line of thought differ from taking kids to playgrounds to giving them cash. Having this in mind, so many people believe giving money to children for good result in school is not a beneficial method, Others, on the contrary, stand on the other side of the continuum. I, personally, concur with the former notion because of the two reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, giving cash to kids for high marks may entice students to do anything to receive money. To be more specific, money have been always a persuading praise for kids and they fell happy every time get money from parents. Value of the money for children might cause them to use inappropriate methods like cheating to get the high score. In fact, money would turn into a goal to young students and they may think to every method to get the praise. For example, they may manipulate their scores sheet or look for assignments answer on the internet instead of accomplishing by themselves to reach their goal. In this way, students not only do not try hard to get good results but also may use improper cheating methods, which may deteriorate their future.
Secondly, offering money in exchenge of good grades may drop the value of education in kids eyes. It is crystal clear that when kid continuosly recieve money for their good mark they will missundestand that they are studing for parents and not for theirselves futur. In this circumstances, students by not geting money for their good grades may stop doing their assignments and homeworks.Since parent care about kids bihavour they may either start to pay again or try to correct kids behaviour. Sometimes when parents decide not to give childern for good results in school the relationship between parents and kid may ruine and it take time to be rebiult.Thus, money is not a good prise for good marks in school.
To wrap it up, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons bring us to the conclusion that money is not a good incentive for kids to study harder and get better results. For, it deteriorates the real value of school and lessons and because it resulted in some inappropriate behaviors in students like cheating.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in fact, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85185185185 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71010123088 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513580246914 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.0816864615 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.8125 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3125 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393128703434 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132396410334 0.076458572812 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065938263179 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228115551005 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0796655802946 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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