Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade(mark) they get in high school. Do you think this is a good idea?3
In today's societies, parents use a plethora of incentive to encourage kid to pay more attention to their classes and get excellent scores. These methods depending on the parent’s line of thought differ from taking kids to playgrounds to giving them cash. (accordingly), so many people believe giving money to children for good result in school is not a beneficial method, Others, on the contrary, stand on the other side of the continuum. I, personally, concur with the former notion because of the two reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, giving cash to kids for high marks may entice students to do anything to receive money. To be more specific, money have been always a persuading reward for kids and they fell happy every time get money from parents. Value of the money for children might cause them to use inappropriate methods like cheating to get the high score. In fact, money would turn into a goal to young students and they may think to every method to get the reward. For example, they may manipulate their scores sheet or look for assignments answer on the internet instead of accomplishing them by themselves to reach their goal. In this way, not only do not students try hard to get good results but also may use improper cheating methods, which may deteriorate their future.
Secondly, offering money in exchange of good grades may drop the value of education in kids eyes. It is crystal clear that when kid continuously receive money for their good mark they will misunderstand that they are studying for parents and not for raising their personal knowledge and have better future. In this circumstances, students by not getting money for their good grades may stop doing their assignments and homework. Since parent care about kids’ behavior they may either begin to pay again or try to correct kids’ behavior. Sometimes when parents decide not to give children for good results in school the relationship between parents and kid may blur and it take time to be rebuilt. Thus, money is not a good prize for good marks in school.
Lastly, some people, on the other hand might say student can learn how to be a good money manager by receiving money from parents for their good results in school. At first glance, this claim may sound completely true, but this statement need to be considered precisely. It is crystal clear that different students would represent various behavior toward money, some will spend it for unnecessary items and some will save it. In fact, features like being a good money manager come mostly from parent behavior rather than just having money because kids imitate parent's behavior in these types of situations.
To wrap it up, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons bring us to the conclusion that money is not a good incentive for kids to study harder and get better results. For, it deteriorates the real value of school and lessons and because it resulted in some inappropriate behaviors in students like cheating.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Accordingly
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...al knowledge and have better future. In this circumstances, students by not getting ...
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Message: Did you mean 'takes'?
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...between parents and kid may blur and it take time to be rebuilt. Thus, money is not ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in fact, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2510.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 512.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90234375 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59091288735 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48828125 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8014376925 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.090909091 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2727272727 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95454545455 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398428682588 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132048661366 0.076458572812 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758666305401 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227006122137 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825118946392 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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