Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
In today's society, it is critically important that people be focused on what they are entitled to do as there are a lot of distractions that take away their attention. In this regard, while some believe that since people are multitaskers, they do very few things well, others disagree with this saying that being busy does not mean people are not focused. I personally prefer to argue that yet people are busier than ever they were, nowadays they are able to manage themselves and be concentrate. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that, as human being learn and grow through their experiences, people are now a better multitaskers and functional than ever were. consequently, they can manage themselves with no difficulty to be occupied with different tasks and obtain a great result. If you compare this generation with fifty years ago you might get the answer readily, and observe how people wisely prioritize their responsibilities and smartly would select them to spend more quality time to finish them with perfect result. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this given that my little sister is much more capable than me in order to manage her responsivities and doing all of them on time, for example, she easily manages to be a top student at school and at the same time she is active in artistic program in her free time, she has been selected to be in a volleyball team of her school, and she already has great knowledge about internet and technology. This explains that today people not only are not distracted but also are more capable to be multitaskers with high quality.
Furthermore, technological advancement contributes people to doing their tasks rapidly and concisely. It is a well-known fact that technology has been playing an influential role in every day’s life, and provide the opportunity for everyone from children to elderly people to get their jobs done. For example, these days, people do not need to spend their time on communication in order to get the news from their old parents or take care of them. They can conveniently head to their work and at the same time reminds their grandparents to take their medicine on time, and make a video call in order to company with them. So they can spend their spare time for other activities which they are assigned to accomplish.
In conclusion, I personally believe that being occupied with so many different things, does not imply that people are less focused, in contrast, they are a better multitasker and more focused than before. It is simply because they learn through their experiences how to prioritize their different tasks and get them done on time, and on top of that technological advances as a smart tool provides an opportunity for them to save more time for repetitive daily work and use this spare time for other activity which they are assigned to do.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 167, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Consequently
...itaskers and functional than ever were. consequently, they can manage themselves with no dif...
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Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: ANINFOR_EVERY_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'in everyday'?
Suggestion: in everyday
...gy has been playing an influential role in every day’s life, and provide the opportunity for...
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...lly believe that being occupied with so many different things, does not imply that people are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, so, well, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, to begin with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2452.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 506.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84584980237 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71941929356 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49209486166 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 778.5 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.5886694684 48.9658058833 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.25 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.625 20.6045352989 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5625 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24619084565 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0934178054692 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741538568495 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169428027264 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733160844844 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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