No one cany deny the fact that, people in my country always accepted and celebrated cultural attributes hroughout the whole history. On that ground, it reinforces cultural values among community members such as value, respect, good educations, personal responsibility, and etc. In this ground, some people contend that believing and accepting our ancient tradition is a part of responsibilty that people do in their lives. On the other side, there is a group of people who think that people can foloow their own footsteps and act differently from old theories. Certainly, from my vantage point, the former point contains more weight. For the following paragraphs, I will delve into most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my stance.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that irrefuably, ancient belives and tradition are meant to be for good reasons which can serve a good purpose in people’s lives. In fact, some theories represent scientific perpsectives. Contrary, with modernization in last few decades, there are whole group of people whose belives get diluted, and thereby, their lives has become foreign to them which do not serve any fruitful purpose. To shed more light on it, take an example of vaccination which is given to newborn. Many parents refute to follow this method of vaccination as they thinm that their child might not bear the pain at this age. However, the basic theory behind this vaccination process is to produce antibodies in newborn’s bodies so that they can fights against severe dieases in the future. Ultimately, denying and not accepting old methods of culture might lead to bad consequences in the lives.
Another noteworthy reason is that cultural characteristics share the sense of comfort and belongings amond community. To be more specific, it enhances social bond and emotional connection between people whereby people can feel of warmth in their lives. Drawing from my own family’s example can clear the idea what has been elaborated above. Like most of other families in my country, my father and his ‘s families have been living together for longtime. The concept of living in a joint family is very prevalent in my country. I accept that when people live together in one house, they can apparently share happines in each other’s lives. On top of that, whenever any of my family members are in difficulties, we always stand for each others to fortify the difficulty by joining hands together. On the contrary, people who have not accepted old methodolgy of living in a family do not have anyone to share their happiness in the family in good times. Gradually, they start feeling of lineliness even in their own home. Admittedly, it is judicious to say that when people follow their family’s rituals, they never regret in the life.
All in all, by contemplating all remarks, in spite of the fact that many people may not agree with my view point, I deelpy believe that people must need to follow their culture and traditions. This is because old rituals are always made of in people’s benefits, and it can spread happiness and feeling of unity in one’s lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: etc.
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'groups'?
Suggestion: groups
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'fight'
Suggestion: fight
...es in newborn’s bodies so that they can fights against severe dieases in the future. U...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, first, however, if, may, so, in fact, such as, in spite of, on the contrary, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2629.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 520.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05576923077 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70990881198 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523076923077 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 812.7 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5741613346 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.16 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194114706451 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536815650818 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057908908902 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125543235847 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213192112747 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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