Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to

As far as I concern, People have been debating about the pros and cons of the ways of parent's spend their time with children. Spending a valuable time is very crucial now days because of busy life for parents and kids as well. Everyday, People is busy with work and meantime children are busy at school. Some people would like to spend their valuable time with playing games and sports with children, other group do not agree with that. I strongly agree with the first group of the people for the following two rationales.

To begin with, Any kind of game and sports can create refreshing effect on children as well parents after long stressful day with work. I think, this is a really good bonding time between family. Relaxation is as important as education to increase productivity. Anyone can get bored easily with just spending a whole day with studying. I will illustrate my personal example for this. During my school days, I used to play cricket with my father everyday which helped me to improve my grades. I was so grateful that my father understood the importance of sports and games which can help any kid to relax after the long day at school.

The another reason is that Playing sports or games can help to improve creativity of mind. I would like to mention more my view point for the playing outdoor sports mainly after the school as I am an athlete through out my life. Any kind of sport is very good exercise. Healthy mind needs healthy body. For Example, I used to play volley ball and basket ball in my college days that helped me to build up my confidence and strong physics. Also, outdoor sports is a good exercises. So, there were so many days I played volleyball in stead of going to the gym and lifting heavy weights which has higher chances to create any physical injuries.

However, some people may asset that Going over the homework and education after the school help to improve children's grades which is true too. Again, as per my view everyone has their own thinking how to provide some refreshment to their children. Recently, federal research center released a survey and two thirds of parents believe that playing sports after the school is the best refreshment kids and bonding time for the family.

All in all, I strongly consider that all kind of games create a good bonding relationship as well it helps to improve kid's stamina and physics. In genera, I wholeheartedly believe that a very first thing we should do now is to admit the importance of games or outdoor activities as the key to open the door of our bleak future.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: Every day
...busy life for parents and kids as well. Everyday, People is busy with work and meantime ...
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Suggestion:
...d their valuable time with playing games and sports with children, other group do...
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Suggestion: every day
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Suggestion: throughout
...nly after the school as I am an athlete through out my life. Any kind of sport is very good...
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...d to play volley ball and basket ball in my college days that helped me to build ...
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...e were so many days I played volleyball in stead of going to the gym and lifting heavy weig...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, really, so, third, well, for example, i think, kind of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2120.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63894967177 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3795812259 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487964989059 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1092197153 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3333333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0416666667 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275652317063 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747943237047 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822463212584 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155200460671 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109553164184 0.0645574589148 170% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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