Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
To ensure a better quality life our parents have to do lot of work which in turn cause them busy all the day. The free time they get sometimes, spend with their family. Some people believe that parents should use the leisure time with their children by doing their class work on the other hand, other holds the opinion that they spend time with playing games or sports with children. I agree with the later groups for some reasons that I elaborate in the following paragraph.
First of all, children are already overwhelmed by excessive class work load in their school. Recently school increases the class time and different courses that take the most of the day time of the children. As a result they become exhausted if they don’t get the time for playing or other activities that can refresh their mind. I think, parents are the best friends for their children who can make their day joyful. A vivid example shed on light on this subject, my little nephew put huge effort do well in their class so that they have to go school, couching centre after school and then do their homework by themselves. These all cause them to undergo a stressful life and sometimes they get bored. That’s why my sister always try to give them quality time by playing whit them.
Second, parents can teach other essential lessons by playing games or sports with their children that ultimately make the children more confident and smart to lead their life in future. Only doing class assignment properly could not build up a talented child. There are many aspects in our life that helps to establish a better life. For example, if parents play football or swimming to spend a happy moment it also teaches the child how to swim. This also would be beneficiary for the child in future. So playing is not merely waste of time but it also teaches valuable lessons to child and makes the moment unforgettable, remains in child’s memory for a long period of time.
In conclusion, it is obvious that there is nothing that is alternative to parents in the world. To maintain a better life or brought up child with a lovable environment, it is crucial to spend time with children with full of joy and pleasure which is not fulfill without playing games or other type of sports with them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
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Suggestion: in the future
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'fulfilled'.
Suggestion: fulfilled
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68407960199 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3433746853 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492537313433 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9949038474 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1052631579 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1578947368 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68421052632 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387987389974 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109742555093 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103980393123 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250307455141 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120634675144 0.0645574589148 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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