Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As time passes and people become more developed, they become more aware of the importance of upbringing of children. Parents have an undeniably important role in personal and social life of their children. The controversial question which arises here is whether parents spend their free times playing games with their children or helping in doing their homework. I personally contend that it is beneficial that parent paly games or sports when they want to spend their free times with their children. In what follow, two elaborated reason will vindicate my standpoints.
Firstly, although helping and overseeing children's homework and assignment have a constructive influence on their performance, it is true that the impact of playing games and sports is far beyond these. Not only do playing games and sports make a significant contribution on formation of personality and mentality, but they also pave the way for improvement of social skills in children. They can learn a profuse amount of things by playing games and sports along with their parents. For example, they learn how to cooperate in the team, how to solve problems, how to create a creative idea, how to compete, and how to act in diverse situations, to name but a few. As a result, playing games and sports have an efficacious impact on children's mind, and they can be considered as an integral parts of parent's responsibilities in today's world.
Secondly, as it is mentioned above, not only have playing games and sports instructive impact on children's mentality and personality which they can be more successful in the future, but they also have a positive impact on both children and parents physical health. With this in mind, parents and children can play with each other either regularly or when they have free times. They can do some sports such as swimming, soccer, biking, and so forth. When they play or sport, they have considerably healthy body both mentality and physically, for they can burn their fats as well as they can get a way their tension and stress. Moreover, nowadays, with the advent of technology, there are more facilities and amenities available for children either in school or in outside of school. Children can do their homework independently. ON the other hand, it is better that parents let their children do their homework independently, so it helps them to cope their problems facing in the future.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons above lead us the conclusion that it is better that parents allocate more time to their children for playing games and sport. They have mutual interest. Children's personality and mentality can form in this way. Moreover, they help parents and children to have healthier life style due to physical activities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in short, such as, as a result, as well as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2302.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05934065934 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77833319998 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457142857143 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3698428022 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.619047619 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38095238095 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28246444724 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109948995805 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679427680869 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208580910877 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05987358129 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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