Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
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As time passes and people become more developed, they become more aware of the importance of getting information. In such a sophisticated word, where we are living, there is a profuse amount of ways in which people can access the information. The controversial question which arises here is whether it is essential that being aware of diverse news all around the world. I personally contend that being cognizant of the events which occur all around the world has a significant role in people's lives. In what follows, two elaborated reasons will vindicate my standpoints.
The first reason is that not only can people increase their information about diverse news whether in their country or in the world, they but also can elevate their knowledge in different fields of studies such as medical, science, politics, economics, astronomy and sport, to name but a few. Knowing about events that happen around the world can pave the way for many occupations in their fields of work, and it plays an undeniably important role in their success. For example, a doctor or a professor has to search and gain a profuse amount of information when he wants to do a project. In other words, these peoples have to know about the cutting edge discoveries all around the world whether by getting news or by searching on the Internet.
The second reason is that, as can be felt easily, the style of living has been changed thanks to the galloping rate of technology improvement. All countries in general and people in special can communicate with each other in a convenient way. Countries have more ties with each other in order to increase their benefits either mutual or alone. As a consequence, if an event occurs in one country, it may affect other countries too. What I mean is that some events have a destructive or constructive impact all around the world. For example, the rate of gold, oil, and precious metals are the world. If the rate of these commodities is increased or decreased, many works and occupations are affected. As a result, getting information about diverse events all around the world has an efficacious role in individuals' lives.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that knowing about the various events all around the world is both important and integral especial for some occupations in order to be successful in their career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a convenient way" with adverb for "convenient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, as to, for example, i mean, in general, in short, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91315136476 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75463750012 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483870967742 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6882864205 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3888888889 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197816261926 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651627034456 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507985100178 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130280219238 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222161975056 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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