Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: After high school, students should have at least one year to work or travel. It's better than attending university straight away.
As time passes and people become more developed, they become more aware of the importance of education. Moreover, students are confronted with one of the important decision when they finish their high school regarding further education in the course of their lives. A controversial question which arises here is whether they should attend to university without any delay or gap or they should work or travel for one year and then attend to university. I personally content that students can have more benefit by working for one year before attending university and stating their field of study. In what follows, two elaborated reasons will vindicate my standpoints.
The first reason is that in today's world, there is a profuse amount of educational centers and universities which suggest diverse academic programs and facilities. They usually are expensive due to their amenities. Students prefer to attend to these universities because they believe that studying in these universities not only can increase their opportunities when they want to find a job, they but also can provide excellent knowledge in their field of studies. On the other hand, students have to move to other cities to pursue their education because their cities do not have great university or their fields of study which they are interested in are in another city. Living in another city can create more expenses. As a result, studying a great university and other cities require money. Students can work after high school, and save money to attend to a university which they want.
The second reason is that working in a company or corporation would be a great opportunity which students can make a good decision regarding what they want to study in the future. In the workplace, students can become more aware of various fields of study and their application in the workplaces, and they can pursue their interested in the university in academic places and become more specialists. As a result, students not only can improve their social skills before attending university, they but also can make a sufficient and efficacious decision about their field of study.
In short, Students can save money by working after high school and spent it on their education in the future. Moreover, they could enhance their social skills in the workplace as well as they could make a proper decision about their program in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 169, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are usually
... academic programs and facilities. They usually are expensive due to their amenities. Stude...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, moreover, regarding, second, so, then, well, in short, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07848101266 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66513388625 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435443037975 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.055835406 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2352941176 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16983756775 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738538221229 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777063256824 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122849565043 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634226623741 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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