Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Human beings are regarded as the most intelligent animals on earth without any doubt. For a quite long time, we have been able to tackle many difficult problems through learning and to be the one we want to be. However, there is another voice that some skills will not obtained by learning such as leadership. Because this kind of ability requires not only the professional expertise but strong management. On the other hand, some argue that there is always a way for people to build up a sense of leadership. As I say, there are more merits than demerits to choose the latter opinion. I will take a closer look at the statement by giving the following reasons.
The most and immediate point is working experience is necessary and instructive for people to learn the leadership. Leadership results from a group or team. Therefore, working in a company provides an environment for people to learn how to be a leader. I cannot think of a better illustration than my father’s. when I was young, my father was a common stuff in his company. And he always wanted to be a leader as he has a strong will to improve his comprehensive ability and fulfill his own values. In order to achieve this goal, he has bought many books about management and how to be a successful leaders, which is really important for him to know what should be done to improve one’s leadership. By doing so, he has been promoted as a leader in his team. Books are beneficial for one to gain some knowledge and information of how to be a leader. Afterall, many of these kind of books are written by famous CEOs from big companies.
Another point worth mentioning is that leadership is about the ability understanding, which can be learnt. As the saying goes, men know men. There is no better note can explain my point in this case. Being a leader should understand the strengths and weaknesses of the one he is charged so as to manage them and make everything operate well. one can learn how to communicate with each other. For instance, I can ask my colleagues whether they like the project that will be done in a short amount of time or not to check out who is the suitable person for this job. Furthermore, private conversation also help one to know everyone’s problems so that it will be helpful for being a leader.
Third, whether can learn to be a leadr
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 270, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'obtain'
Suggestion: obtain
...another voice that some skills will not obtained by learning such as leadership. Because...
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Line 2, column 317, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...ter illustration than my father's. when I was young, my father was a common stu...
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Line 2, column 605, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'leader'?
Suggestion: leader
...t management and how to be a successful leaders, which is really important for him to k...
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Line 2, column 860, Rule ID: AFTERALL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'after all'?
Suggestion: After all
... and information of how to be a leader. Afterall, many of these kind of books are writte...
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Line 2, column 878, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...f how to be a leader. Afterall, many of these kind of books are written by famous CEOs fro...
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Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...and weaknesses of the one he is charged so as to manage them and make everything operate...
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Line 3, column 343, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: One
... them and make everything operate well. one can learn how to communicate with each ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, really, so, therefore, third, well, as to, for instance, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58571428571 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74084334142 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519047619048 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.6222796012 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.04 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0570304396687 0.236089414692 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0170114367104 0.076458572812 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0250415255868 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0346056045793 0.150856017488 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270651142524 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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