Our parents play an important role in our life. Personally, I believe that whenever parents have a free time, they should dedicate it in an amusement their kids. The reasons that made me think this way are many and I am going to elaborate them to empower my viewpoint.
First of all, most of the time kids get exhausted from a long rough day in school. A day full of assignments and exams require them to focus and sit still. A lot of studies show that boys need to release their pent up energy so they can focus more, otherwise will just cause negative impact on the kids ability to understand ,and reversely affect their brain development. For example, teachers did research for some boys in a science class, they find out that kids are more alert and focused after the teachers took them out to dig the ground and plant some flowers. Ultimately, this activity has helped the kids by getting out their energy which made them totally distracted.
Secondly, entertainment will enhance the relationship between the kids and their parents. When kids see their parents playing with them like their friend, it makes them more comfortable to open up to their family like a friend. For instance, when children play with the parents a certain game, and some thing happened in this game which maybe the same thing that the kids had been in when they were playing with their pals. In this way the kids may tell their parents how they acted. So the parents now more reassuring of their kids.
In conclusion, for all the causes that I mentioned up, I totally agree that parents should take the advantage of these free times and spend it with their kids. Too much pressure on kids and homework could negatively affect them and make them unwilling to do their duties.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1446.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63461538462 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32726740406 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554487179487 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3295540037 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205800664544 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704742374835 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065545626266 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131084574089 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043822583679 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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