Having passion and being ambitious is a fundamental thing in life. Personally, I would like to be more realistic and have a real goal than chasing rainbows. The reasons behind my point are money and I am going to state them in the next paragraph to elaborate my point of view.
To begin with, as we all know that time is money and we know the logic end of realistic goal, but the end of ambitious goal is anonymous. So, having plan to keep you on track with your reliable goal most of the time successful, because the end or the destiny well-known. For example, when I was in high school, I planned to apply for a dental school. I kept myself focus, worked day and night and had a lot of scarifies. I got accepted at dental school and I so cheerful and glad I picked realistic goal.
Secondly, ambitious dreams most of the time not work. In this case a lot of people got depressed or depleted because they did not be able to achieve what they planned to. Hence, they ruin their life and their future, and they will lose the opportunity to find a job. Sometimes they committed suicide. For instance, people who committed suicide after they lose in a stock company. because they have magical believes, they spend all their wealth chasing an illusion and the results are disastrous when they lose.
In conclusion, for all reasons that I mentioned above I strongly agree that everyone should follow a fact or real thing rather than imaginary thing. I know sometimes we have to get out of our comfort zone and we should try new things rather than being stuck with the ordinary concepts, but to be honest, it is too risky and my cost hands and legs. Moreover, reality is always fruitful and promising.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 380, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...ide after they lose in a stock company. because they have magical believes, they spend ...
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Line 4, column 406, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'beliefs' (noun) instead of believes (verb)?
Suggestion: beliefs
...tock company. because they have magical believes, they spend all their wealth chasing an...
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Line 5, column 152, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'know'.
Suggestion: sometimes know
...al thing rather than imaginary thing. I know sometimes we have to get out of our comfort zone ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1394.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51132686084 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43166361249 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566343042071 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8441209299 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1764705882 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0976631458799 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346292455359 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393613858637 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0559378159623 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413490855611 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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