Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, parents tend to be up to their ears at work and hardly have any time left for their children. Therefore, I believe that they should spend their spare time playing games or sports with their kids instead of dealing with their schoolwork. There are two reasons why I feel this way, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, this can help tighten the bond among family members. When parents participate in entertainment activities, not only can they relieve the stress but they can also create memorable moments with their children. For example, my father usually takes me and my little brother to the amusement park every weekend. He buys us icecreams and encourages us to play as many games as possible so that we can relax after stressful hours at school. Whenever we win a game, he gives us a big clap and even screams out loud to congratulate his little ones. We have a lot of fun and unforgettable memories together. These activities bring us much closer together.
Secondly, kids have been spending too much time sitting in class, hence, they need some outdoor activities to stay healthy. Working on school assignments may not benefit their physical and mental health in the long run, but playing sports does. For instance, I live in a coastal area, so my family often goes swimming. We can take a stroll along the beach talking together or play volleyball. I love the feeling of being out in nature, as the fresh air makes me feel relaxed and comfortable. In addition, engaging in sports games there can help me recharge my battery and be more energetic. Thus, parents should involve their children in outdoor activities in order to help them avoid a sedentary lifestyle.
In conclusion, I think that parents should spend their free time doing leisure activities with their kids. Not only does it strengthen family relationships but it also allows kids to become more active and healthy.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89634146341 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5959502048 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603658536585 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.5040163272 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.5263157895 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2631578947 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.31578947368 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250525053175 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690909116291 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826369346296 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163495137124 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694848937561 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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