Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the development of modern technology in this day and age, computer games have become increasingly popular among children. However, In my opinion, parents should not approve of their kids' playing computer games as it is time-consuming. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First of all, it does harm to our health. Spending too much time on screen will adversely affect our body, especially our eyes and necks. It can result in headaches, neck pain, and even vision issues. As children are vulnerable, they are prone to these health problems when playing. Take my little brother as an example, he is only eleven years old, however, most of his spare time is spent on computer games. He loves playing games so much that he could sit in front of the computer for many hours continuously without taking a break. As a result, after a while, the doctor said that his eyes were hurt, causing him to be short-sighted. That is the reason why these types of games are a waste of time so kids should not obtain permission to play them.
Second, playing computer games takes away the time that children are supposed to spend with family or friends. It might also interfere with kids' studying once they get addicted to the games. For instance, it appears that my brother considers playing computer games as his top priority, so he refuses to take part in any extracurricular activities after school. This prevents him from expanding his social relationships as well as acquiring new skills such as communication skills, teamwork, public speaking skills, and so on. Moreover, he tends to spend more time on screen and less time completing his schoolwork, causing his academic performance to be seriously affected due to his lack of concentration on studying. Therefore, parents should help their little ones stay away from computer games.
In conclusion, I believe that computer game has a negative impact on children, for it not only does damage to their health, but it also hinders kids from developing interpersonal skills and excelling in their studying. Adults should not allow them to play these games and encourage them to cultivate other healthy interests instead.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1849.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98382749326 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73695222935 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568733153639 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5002467596 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3157894737 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5263157895 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263816007733 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830240675071 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811964993404 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17398719329 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0140631847883 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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