Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons ans examples to support your answer.
Although it is a difficult question to answer, but I believe that both approaches are useful for children and both methods have its own advantages. Also, children should choose the way that benefits their both educational career and health, it does not matter whether they are playing games and sports or doing their schoolwork. I hold this view because of several reasons.
According to my point of view, because parents usually are occupied on their personal affairs and do not have enough time to spend with their children, thus children can use that time to have fun playing game or sports. In other words, children can take advantage of that spare time by doing enjoyable activities such as playing game, doing sports, listening to music, and doing various works. When children decide to play games , they repulse their anxiety and stress and refresh their mind, which method assists them improve their learning skill during their class. Beside, doing sports maybe beneficial for children because when they do sports and exercise, they enhance their health and strengthen their muscles that might stimulate them for being more efficient and brisk.
Moreover, because of the reason that I have mentioned in previous paragraph, children have plenty of time to do manifold things during the day, so, they can exploit this opportunity to do their assignment and schoolwork. It seems to me that it is better for them to do their homework with their classmates, because, at first, it fortifies their friendship-bond and helps them better communicate with each other, secondly, studying together enables them better understand their lessons. For instance, when I was child, my father was working in Petroleum Ministry and he always came back to home late, thus he did not have extra time to spend with me and my sister. Also, my mother was housewife and she was not able to play with us, she only had time to cook and clean the house. Therefore, I used to go outside and play with my friends after doing my homework. By doing that, I got ride of staying at home all day long and getting bored.
In general, I think children should use their optimally, it does not make difference whether they prefer to play a game or do his homework.
- TPO 37 integrated writing skill 70
- ONE 3
- Summarise the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they cast doubts on specific points made in the reading passage 3
- summarise the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they cast doubt on specific points made in the reading passage 60
- two 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 428, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
...orks. When children decide to play games , they repulse their anxiety and stress a...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, i think, in general, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89210526316 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44936599482 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539473684211 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.2155990367 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.785714286 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1428571429 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.45110844103 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417151319861 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147577062881 0.076458572812 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956629434885 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249649104461 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0873552161108 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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