Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
According to my point of view, it depends on people's situations and conditions that what kind of job they decide to choose, but I believe that it is better for children to choose their jobs based on their interests and professions, it does not matter that whether that job is similar to their parents' job or not. I hold this view because of several reasons. First, if children choose their jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs, they will not be interested and satisfied about that, which probably discourage them and cause several bad effects. Second, however, if they choose jobs that are very different from their parents job, nobody can help them and give them some relative experiences, which can help them in their job, therefore they should rely only on themselves.
As far as I am concerned, if children choose their jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs, they will not be enthusiastic about that. In other words, if they do not interested in their parents jobs, and they accept that job based on only their parents preference, it will result in detrimental consequences, both for children and their parents. For instance, my cousin, who was 26 years old when he graduated from his university while he was master in mechanical engineering, decided to work with his father in a bakery, because he had not alternative choice. So, after couple of months, because he was not interested in cooking breads and cakes, he determined to quit from his job. That decision impressed him badly, because he felt that he faced to a failure and he had nothing to do. But, at first if he decided to choose a job , which was related to his major and he was interested in, he would not be so upset.
Moreover, if children choose jobs that are very different from their parents jobs, they should tolerate some extra conditions. To illustrate, they should start working on their jobs without help and guidance of anybody, which is so hard for a new worker. Besides, they should put themselves in new situations due to gain some ability and experience in their jobs, and even bear low salaries in their first months, because their boss is not their father or parents to do favor for them and give them a good salary, even in first months.
Generally, I believe that it does not matter that one's decides to choose which kind of jobs, whether it is similar to their parents' jobs or not, but what is important is children should choose a job, which they are interested in.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, kind of, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2035.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67816091954 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47959754079 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432183908046 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.6942558824 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.357142857 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0714285714 20.6045352989 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.425213936518 0.236089414692 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.195147886308 0.076458572812 255% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133456279745 0.0737576698707 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.314915490013 0.150856017488 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0813584307997 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 58.1214874552 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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