Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The life of any working parents are so full of commitments that they usually don't have time for some personal or social duties and activities. I do agree that parents should spend their free time in playing sports or games, as these activities are essential to their health, emotional stability and happiness. I believe that children should depend on themselves in doing their schoolwork, under the supervision of their parent, but without direct interference.
To begin with, the parents, like any human beings, needs to have some activities that vital to their health, whether physically or emotionally. I do believe that playing sport is vital to their health. When are able to maintain a healthy lifestyle, they will able to take care, not only of themselves, but also of their beloved children. Furthermore, these kind of activities are important to the emotional stability of the parents, where they can feel some personal space where they can practice their hobbies. For example, I have read a research that stated that parents who regularly play sports and have any kind of hobbies or social activities are happier in their life, which naturally reflects positively on their relation with their children. Having said all the above, this way of life will be my favorite choice.
Second, the parents should help their children to be more independent, especially when it comes to their school duties or homework. They learn how to solve their problems and fulfill their commitments, without expecting help from others. The parents should play the role of the adviser and the guide when needed, not to interfere directly. If you teach your child to be independent in his early years, he likely will have happy years in his future, because he has learnt face the difficulties of life. I do apply this way in my life with my children, where I found that it influenced their personalities in a very good way. That doesn't mean to not have fum time with your children, on the contrary, you can have them learn how to practice sport with you, which will, on the long run, enhance their health and confidence.
To sum up, I think it is crucial for the parents to spend their time in activities that improve the overall quality of their life, sports are one good way to achieve that since it gives you the good health and mood. It goes without saying that caring about their health will make them happy and will enable them to care more for their lovely children. They should also encourage their children to engage in these physical activities to have a lovely healthy happy family.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, second, so, for example, i think, kind of, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8665158371 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50170699898 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475113122172 0.524837075471 91% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6769266823 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.5 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5555555556 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275665269976 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103648386654 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588510792277 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201409821154 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058857855448 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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