Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork.
Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Modern life with a lot of problems often makes people very busy with it. People must worry about too many issues that they do not have time to care about themselves or their children. As a result, in this time that parents cannot look after, children have the ability to choose what they want to do, this is time for their hobbies. Some people argue that children should spend this time to play games or sports, however, some claim that it is best use that time doing things that relate to schoolwork. In my opinion, I believe that children should take this time to have funs in playing games or sports.
Nowadays, studying in school remain almost time of children. They sometimes must study up to ten hours a day. It is too much for children to study. Therefore, I believe, in period when children are not in school, they should be permit to do what they want such as playing sports or games with their friends. It is very good way for children to relax after stressing hours at school. If children also spend their free time for studying or something relevant to it, I believe this will make children very tired, even scare the studying. Beside of that, spending too much time on learning is not an effective method. Some studies have claims that children that have relaxing time between studying hours have better result than children do not have. In general, when parents are too busy to play with their children, they should permit them to play what they want.
Additionally, playing games or sports is also one way for studying. It is a fact that studying at school is not enough, students must study in outside environment. Things that children learn from outside such as communicating skill, independence or having more fiends will help children develop more completely. For example, one child who always pays attention on studying, all his/her time uses to studying or things relevant to this, this child will develop not completely and does not have friends. It is very negative for this child in the future and in the mental development. In basically, playing after stress hours of learning is necessary for a child to fulfill.
Some people can say that if parents permit their children to play games or sports, they can have risk of too passion on playing and forgetting the studying. Or some people states that this playing time can make children be dangerous. Nevertheless, I believe that is just a short sight of them. Children playing what they want does not mean that their parent do not care anything about what they playing. I mean here parents have their enough controlling with the playing of their children.
In conclusion, I want to state again my perspective here. Parents should permit their children to playing what they want in their free time. This is a good method for the normal developing of children. Modern day requires many in a person if he/she want to success. And of course, children should equip early for their future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 229, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'permitted'?
Suggestion: permitted
...ldren are not in school, they should be permit to do what they want such as playing sp...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 236, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'permit' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
...re not in school, they should be permit to do what they want such as playing sports o...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 250, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...day requires many in a person if he/she want to success. And of course, children sho...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, therefore, for example, i mean, in conclusion, in general, of course, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2446.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74031007752 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36942838126 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.412790697674 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.9 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2415484571 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5333333333 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.93333333333 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.445632955661 0.236089414692 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12638333394 0.076458572812 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113516629491 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284991043275 0.150856017488 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.169271982193 0.0645574589148 262% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.81 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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