Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is common that parents now are suffering great pressures from their work and are left with less time to be with their children. So, the problem comes: how to utilize this precious parent-child time? From my perspective, I prefer to spend this time having fun with my kids.
First of all, under the advanced and comprehensive educational mechanism, children are able to perform schoolwork without the help from their parents. So, there is no need for parents to spend too much time with their children doing something related to schoolwork. For example, each student is assigned with an advisor. And no matter what questions a student encounter in his/her study, he/she can ask for help from the advisor. Also, many schools now are offering students with multi-functional platform to have discussion and conduct QA session with teachers online. It is obvious that there is no need for parents to get involved in children’s schoolwork.
In addition, students are now facing with great stresses and many of them have to take various extra-curricular courses. So, having fun with parents plays a more important role in their life. Activities such as playing basketball or guessing game can significantly release their pressures and have good refreshment. For example, every night after I finish my homework, my father would like to play chess with me. This kind of father-daughter time can always help me get rid of all my annoyance and troubles. It is clearly that having fun with parents matters a lot to children.
Furthermore, having fun of playing sports can enable students to strengthen their bodies and build their muscles. Only with healthy body can students pursue their goals and achieve success. For example, it is often reported that some students fail to start their career due to their poor health condition. So, parents are supposed to spend more time with kids to participate in more sports.
In a nutshell, engaging in some non-academic activities plays an important role in students’ life. Playing sports and games can help students relieve their pressures and strengthen their bodies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, then, for example, in addition, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16811594203 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.847507081 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524637681159 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.9830781733 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.9047619048 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4285714286 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295221326687 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103258858028 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732684133174 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181220903208 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583965621423 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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