It is undeniable that in today’s complicated world, people use many new ways to share their moments with others. Some people like to upload their pictures and videos to social networking websites, while others prefer not to do so. I, personally, prefer not to create such records. The reasons why I feel this way are explored in the following essay.
To begin with, I believe that social media lacks privacy and exposes users to government and corporate intrusions. Each person leaves a data trail on the Internet. Every time someone creates a social media account, they provide personal information that can include their name, birthdate, geographic location and personal interests. In addition, companies collect data based on user’s behavior, meaning that they watch where, when and how their users interact with their platform. All of this data is stored and used by companies to better target advertising for their users. Sometimes, many companies share this data with a third-party, without the user’s contest, which is done in purpose of money or by accident. For example, a few years ago, I worked for a company that had built a famous website for celebrities to communicate with their fans. At that time, it was a successful project, but, due to a bug in their program hackers could rob their data. As s result of this, many celebrities lost their information and their personal chats was exposed to the public. This example clearly demonstrates how likely it is that one day the user’s data is abused by a third party.
Moreover, social media can entice people to waste time. Since, modern life has many complicated aspects, people should dedicate their precious time to what matters most in their lives. This is true especially for youngsters, who might lose the golden opportunity of entering a good university by spending their time in social media. For example, last week, I read an article in a major newspaper about the effects of social media on concentration. The research has indicated that when people are alerted to a new social media activity, such as a new facebook message, it takes them 1 hour on average to return to their original task. This example demonstrates how social media can steal our time on each day, even without us noticing it.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that social media is not beneficial for people. That is because these applications can not secure their user’s data and because they are such a waste of time.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, third, while, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2070.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98795180723 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63614237572 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551807228916 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1812602728 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0909090909 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8636363636 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90909090909 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210178972442 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705624825474 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0937050360038 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156372678964 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124419866919 0.0645574589148 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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