Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
It is axiomatic that in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, human beings use different ways to share their moments with others. These days, due to the advancement of technology individuals use websites and applications in order to share their experience with their friends. While many people hold the opinion that uploading pictures and videos via the internet is a sound way, on the other hand, many individuals believe that these websites and applications are not suitable. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter opinion, and the reasons to support my idea are presented in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, since the emergence of new technologies people are provided with various types of communication applications such as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter to name but a few. In fact, these online-based tools could work like two edge sword; indeed, many people trust to social-networking sites to share the beautiful moments of their life. However, due to the fact that always fraudulent is an inevitable part of societies, it makes a significant amount of problems for people. In this vein, if a famous person like actors, athletics, and scientists want to use these websites, they will always in risk of abuse of their personal information. My own experience will bring this notion home. A few years ago, I worked for a start-up- new companies in which develop and sell their idea to other firms. We had to establish a new website for celebrities in which to communicate with their fans. At first, it seems a successful project but after that, we sold this application to a highly prestigious company to take advantage of our system, it had been recognize that because of a bug in our programs hackers could rob data through a fishing exploit. Consequently, many celebrities who used this website lost their information and their personal chats exposure to public websites.
Moreover, since mankind become so intricate these days, people have to dedicate their precious time to their necessary parts of their life. In fact, people have to consider that if they want to be successful in their future, they will spend their time on their lessons; especially, youngsters. As a result, not only can individuals concentrate on crucial tasks but also it prevents wasting their time. For example, if a teenager spends a huge amount of time on social networks, he or she will lose the golden opportunity to enter a high-level university. Ultimately, the harms of using online applications and websites to share photos and texts are irreversible.
In conclusion, having the aforementioned reasons and points into account, I hold the opinion that using social-networking websites is not beneficial for people. Because these applications could not prevent to secure personal information of famous individuals and also wastes young people's time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1054, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'recognized'.
Suggestion: recognized
...ke advantage of our system, it had been recognize that because of a bug in our programs h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2416.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16239316239 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00044436283 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536324786325 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 758.7 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.835869777 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.8 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173713660156 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540445701301 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409476328635 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106916816732 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237635328562 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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