In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
It goes without saying in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, human beings are preoccupied since they have to be aware of financial problems. In this regard, individuals have to control their finances from their young age. While some people hold the opinion that children do not worry about monetary, others on the other side of the continuum, believing that teenagers have to manage their own money. As far as I am concerned, I believe later the opinion and the reasons to substantiate my point of view are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, financial issues are one of the most important building blocks of people. To be more specific, it is crystal clear that in modern life money is the most significant factor of being happy and a sense of satisfaction. In this vein, children have to calculate their costs and planning for their future. Since their parents due to problems in their personal life maybe have to reduce pocket money which they give to their kids. A personal experience of mine can drive this fact home. When I was a primary school student, my father lost his second job. So as to, he obliged to decrease my pocket money, but I saved a big amount of money and could spend a few months with my own money. If I did not save money, I would not spend that time without worries.
Furthermore, individuals have to be ready for the future and also solve their financial problems when become adults. In this line of thought, children should learn how to manage their money which they receive from their parents. To put it in other words, parents are responsible for learning their kids how to take advantage of their own money. Because children have to experience independent in order when they become adult be able to manage their life. In fact, If children become responsible for their monetary, they will be successful in their personal life.
In conclusion, having the aforementioned reasons and points into account, I believe that managing their own money by children is totally beneficial to them. Not only can they enjoy in hard times, but also experience independence from childhood.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ir costs and planning for their future. Since their parents due to problems in their ...
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...student, my father lost his second job. So as to, he obliged to decrease my pocket money...
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...w to take advantage of their own money. Because children have to experience independent...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, second, so, while, as to, in conclusion, in fact, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83606557377 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60273401872 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535519125683 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8921683208 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1578947368 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2631578947 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371503209584 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11148619179 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904407955927 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221139944389 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106021994662 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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