Some people prefer to focus on ambitious dreams while others
think realistic goals are more important. Which do you prefer and
why?
People are motivated by their objectives, their goals make them strive to achieve them. In this regard, although some people believe that, their dreams must be ambitiously, I do not think in this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, thinking to much about ambitious dreams makes people disappointed. Personally speaking, if people think of objectives which are not acheivable, they life will be meaningless. In other words, most of the people do not live on the condition that all they dreams come true, so it is better for them to just be willing of their reasonable goal, since in this way they are more happy with whatever they have. To paint it in a more vivid picture, I read an intresting story about a boy who wanted to be a famous actor, as it was written on the book, the boy was not skillful enough to be a actor, and being a actor was a kind of ambitious dream for him, since he could not achieve his dream, he was disappointed and finally kill himself. Considering this story, we should all have dreams which are not impossible to fulfill.
Second, I am of the opinion that we should see the reality of life and try hard for the reality is meaningful and cause to success. In other words, thinking of dreams which are not available just makes people away from their real objectives. if people think of their ambitious dream, they will not have enough time to concentrate on reality and can not accomplish their afordable goals. For example, when I was a child, a friend of mine had a dream to become a teacher, being a teacher was a reasonable objective for her, therefore after finishing highschool she try hard to be accepted in a university to study teacher training program and finally she got successful and she is a professional teacher now, as she wanted since chilhood. As you can see, if my friend wanted to be a pilot, since it was not acheivable according to her condition, she could not obtain her real objective.
Finally, I firmly believe that people's objective must be achievable, having ambitious dream not only make them disappointed, but also prevent them from trying hard and they can not be successful
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
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Suggestion: dream
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'tries'.
Suggestion: tries
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, so, therefore, for example, kind of, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1799.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63659793814 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62216018596 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484536082474 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.5763546348 48.9658058833 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.384615385 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8461538462 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154894938988 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707989820467 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380872995689 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105640411111 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360390569528 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.1575268817 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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